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| # | Document (Policy / MRPS) | Document line / reference | Proposed Change or Query | Proposer / Affiliation | |||||||
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| #1 | Policy / MRPS | general | For the outsider it is not clear what the name of the Identity Federation is. This should be made clear on the front page of the both documents. | Casper Dreef / eduGAIN secretariat | The candidate updated multiple sections to clarify this matter. | ||||||
| #2 | Policy | Introduction | Linked to the aforementioned and referring to the following text: "For EthERNet, the participation in the EFIS is a service among other services provided to Education and Research community" we would suggest to please clarify and simplify it, in something in the lines of "EFIS - as an indentity federation - is a service provided by EthERNet". We suggest to make a clear distinction between the Federation Operator (EFIS) and the NREN (EthERNet) throughout the document. | Casper Dreef / eduGAIN secretariat | The introduction was updated | ||||||
| #3 | Policy | Section 3.6 | change "Service Description" to "the Federation Policy" | Casper Dreef / eduGAIN secretariat | Candidate updated the text | ||||||
| #4 | MRPS | Section 2 | Paragraph 2 - typo. "updates" | Casper Dreef / eduGAIN secretariat | typo fixed, but it would be better readable if it was made a separate sentence. | ||||||
| #5 | Policy | Section 3.1 | Typo in title "Governancef" | Casper Dreef / eduGAIN secretariat | fixed | ||||||
| #6 | Policy | Section 4.1 | "Further participants are Members of Ethiopian Education and Research Network or members that have joined in a second moment, prior approval by the General Assembly and Federation Members that join prior approval by the Directive Board." Unclear what potential members are required to do and if they are eligible. The process is well described on https://efis.ethernet.edu.et/join.html. | Casper Dreef / eduGAIN secretariat | Eligibility criteria were updated | ||||||
| #7 | MRPS | Section 3 | https://efis.ethernet.edu.et/idp-how-to-join/ links to a sharepoint excel workbook. Please use the correct link. | Casper Dreef / eduGAIN secretariat | Link is now correct and working | ||||||
| #8 | MRPS | Section 4 | https://efis.ethernet.edu.et/docs/ leads to 403 error page | Casper Dreef / eduGAIN secretariat | idem | ||||||
| #9 | MRPS | Section 5.1 | See #8 | Casper Dreef / eduGAIN secretariat | idem | ||||||
| #10 (2024 Aug 14th) | Policy | Section 3.4 | In the EFIS Identity Federation Policy document it is said that a Home Organization | Davide Vaghetti/eSC | |||||||
| #11 (2024 Aug 14th) | Policy | All sections | There are quite a large number of typos in the document, probably due to the use of the REFEDS PDF Policy template. Here it is the complete list attached as TXT file:
| Davide Vaghetti/eSC | |||||||
| #12 (2024 Aug 14th) | MRPS | All sections | There are quite a large number of typos in the document, probably due to the use of the REFEDS PDF MRPS template. Here it is the complete list attached as TXT file:
| Davide Vaghetti/eSC | |||||||
| #13 (2024 Aug 14th) | MRPS | 3 | "Checking and verifying organization name and scientific role against respected"... seems to have been truncated, "respected" what? | Thijs Kinkhorst/eSC | |||||||
| #14 (2024 Aug 15th) | Policy | Page 1. Table 1. Row 1. | "...the service provider that use the identity..." should be "provider uses the identity.." and many other similar errata and language flaws. | Francisca Martin-Vergara/eSC | |||||||
| #15 (2024 Aug 15th) | Policy | 3.2. | "Temporarily suspend individual Technology Profiles for a Federation Member" The term Technology Profiles should be defined and be more specific about suspension motives. | Francisca Martin-Vergara/eSC | |||||||
| #16 (2024 Aug 15th) | Policy | 3.4. and 3.5. | "Must send a list of Service Providers which is related to if there is an intention of cancelling its membership". What is the meaning of this sentence? | Francisca Martin-Vergara/eSC | |||||||
| #17 (2024 Aug 15th) | Policy | 5. | Add some general definitions or enumeration of procedures on section 5. Procedures before subsection 5.1, e.g. In this section procedures for joining and withdrawal will be described. | Francisca Martin-Vergara/eSC | |||||||
| #18 (2024 Aug 15th) | Policy | 5.1. | "If the application is denied, the decision and the reason for denying " In case of rejection, the reason for denying must be carefully motivated. | Francisca Martin-Vergara/eSC | |||||||
| #19 (2024 Aug 15th) | MRPS | 3. | "Checking and verifying organization name and scientific role against respected" Is it referred to checking an official ID? | Francisca Martin-Vergara/eSC | |||||||
| #20 (2024 Aug 15th) | MRPS | 5. | Add some general definitions or comment on section 5. Entity Eligibility and Validation before subsection 5.1. | Francisca Martin-Vergara/eSC |